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Your eyes are brown,
and you prefer green to blue.
My eyes are gray and show little emotion.
I hope that’s enough for you.

I don’t care about sexy bodies,
or oral sex.

My mind’s not on your dick,
or the size of my boobs.

Yeah, maybe I could get used to friends with benefits,
but that’s not my priority,
because I’m caring for something different.

They say bad sex ruins the relationship-
Let me prove them wrong,
let me have good luck in this area- to belong.

If sex is what you’re in to,
maybe I’ll give in too.

But maybe we can just be,
with you as you are, and me as me.

Your skin is tanned,
like you’re out in the sun every moment.
My skin is pale with ugly purple mixed in,
I hate the outdoors-

You still hope we’ll win.
©2007-2010 ~freakishlywired
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:iconstarkeeperryoko:
Ohhh.
Awkward moments. o.o

I like how it's straight forward, and not all metaphors, like some poetry can be.

1st Stanza = <3

I would've enjoyed some more rhymes, but that's a personal preference.

--
They save the day!
(That's what they do)
They're the Fantastic Four!
...Plus two.
Bat Man and Robin times three,
Saving the world,
For you and me.
:iconasexual-deviants:
Great poem! Actually I think that the minimal amount of rhyming really helps along the flow of it, so that you concern yourself with the poem's message instead of the way it sounds.

The last line is an amazing ending. :)

-Charlie
:iconkodavu:
Made my skin quiver a little bit. The last two verses stick in my eyes. Beautiful, extravagant in its simplicity.

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I REJECT your reality. I will make my own.
:iconfreakishlywired:
I am always unsure of this one, so your comment is highly valued.

It always gets me that the other person had more confidence.
: )

--
Put this in your signature if you or someone you know is fighting, has survived, or has died in a Pokemon battle.

:heart: The #1 Pokefan of Billy Joel :heart:
:iconkodavu:
Don't be unsure. Work it.

Confidence is overrated. Modesty is the "in" thing now.

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I REJECT your reality. I will make my own.
:iconfreakishlywired:
I will attempt that in the future.
: D

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